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smalltownmind
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0 posted 2003-11-09 05:39 PM


this is unfinished...i'll post the rest when i'm finished ... i was at home this weekend and i was playing the piano (though i dont know how to play very much...just some chords) and i wrote this at about 3 in the morning...in my opinion it is just beautiful on the piano with the vocals and everything....maybe it's kind of weak but i nearly cried writing it. haha. enjoy


December Song

Breathing in, the air is cold
and i'm feeling so alone...
without you, I can't move...
and i cant even think of living without you.

Mist is falling from the air
like tiny snowflakes in your hair
the sun is gone and winter is here
i feel alone though you're standing right there...

in front of me...i just can't reach
and i can't carry my heart that far
Across the mile...to see you smile...
and i just can't wait for December.

The red-orange glow you used to love
has faded away and our dreams are gone...
you're so high...you can't see me
i'm so low...i'm beneath me

Now October has come and i am one
at peace with myself...i'm broken with you...
December was always our song...
then January came and i can't see you...

in front of me...i just can't reach
and i can't carry my heart that far
Across the mile...to see you smile...
and i just can't wait for December.

Remember...how you made me laugh...
through your past...just try to think back...
the sun was warm on your face...
now i've found a place...it's safe here...
you can't hurt me anymore...
But Decemeber will be here before you know
and i'll be there again.

© Copyright 2003 Eric Githens - All Rights Reserved
frolicking dolphin
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1 posted 2003-11-09 06:31 PM


I like it, it seems like it would be a really good song when it's finished, can't wait til you post the finished copy

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

misao
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2 posted 2003-11-09 06:54 PM


I just looooove poems about love. I hope to read more poems from you soon!!!


Match
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3 posted 2003-11-09 07:46 PM


I think the beginning of this was really  good, can't wait to see the end
-ash

I know you think that I shouldnt still love you
I'll tell you that
But if I didn't say it
Well, I'd still have felt it
Where's the sense in tha

dertah
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4 posted 2003-11-09 09:14 PM


yes...yes...i remember....
skyshine
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5 posted 2003-11-09 09:36 PM


I think what you have so far is really good! Hope to see it when you post the rest of it. I liked it....made me think of a couple of things in my life.

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

LiL-Jew
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since 2003-10-28
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6 posted 2003-11-12 06:10 PM


that is so cool, girl you gotta keep writing, that took me back into time. keep it up.
smalltownmind
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7 posted 2003-11-12 06:52 PM


*notes the copywrite name is Eric......guy
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