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SimpleDiscourse
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since 2003-04-24
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0 posted 2003-11-03 08:28 PM



She was living for the way he breathed
And she told him this three times
Each time she listened to him exhale
As he said, “I’m glad it’s keeping
One of us alive.”


© Copyright 2003 Erin Reynolds - All Rights Reserved
b.costen
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since 2003-11-02
Posts 107
ontario, CAN
1 posted 2003-11-03 09:23 PM


good ending, i'm a large fan of strong finishes.

:-\

so what's it going to be then, eh?

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

2 posted 2003-11-04 11:39 AM


good write.  short and sweet
magic_612
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since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
3 posted 2003-11-05 12:25 PM


great job
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