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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-11-02 06:56 PM



Please, just tell me
Straight-up,
No lies –
Please, just tell me,
Just look,
In my eyes –

And tell me the truth,
How do you feel?
What’s eating you up inside?
What will help you heal?
Do you want me to leave?
Or do you want me to stay?
Do you want to keep this going,
Or just throw it all away?

Please, just tell me
Straight-up,
No lies –
Please, just tell me,
Just look,
In my eyes –

And tell me the truth,
What would you like to see?
What do you want to happen?
Do you want to be with me?
You have to let me know,
If not, I’ll move on.
Just say the word,
And I’ll be gone...

Please....Just tell me....
Straight-up....No lies....


[This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (11-02-2003 07:00 PM).]

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peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears
1 posted 2003-11-02 07:06 PM


Good work...expressed your feelings pretty well! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

Match
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since 2002-07-01
Posts 286
Canada Edmonton
2 posted 2003-11-02 07:09 PM


Nice, I liked this it was a great way to show how your feeling. enjoyed
-ash


I know you think that I shouldn't still love you
I'll tell you that
But if I didn't say it
Well, I'd still have felt it
Where's the sense in tha

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

3 posted 2003-11-02 07:39 PM


errrrrrrrr.....(hatred is gritting his teeth)  

some advice....dont grit teeth

lauren03
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since 2002-01-04
Posts 64
oh, usa
4 posted 2003-11-02 07:54 PM


ahh...... I know the feeling all too well... good write....
BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
5 posted 2003-11-03 11:57 AM


OMFG Staci...this was AMAZING! I love every word of this poem! I haven't written in awhile but this is PURE inspiration! Great job!

~J.Lynn

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

*Belabebeautiful*
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6 posted 2003-11-03 07:52 PM


I liked this. After I had read it once I wasn't sure so I pondered it for a while as I read it a second time and I realized just what a good poem it is. Thank you for sharing such an emotional and honest piece. Lovely work, Nicely done.
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
7 posted 2003-11-03 07:55 PM


it was a great one, at first i didnt like it, but then i was thinking about what a great acoustic song this could be and realized the beauty of this poem. great job!!
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
8 posted 2003-11-03 08:32 PM


I also really liked this one, it flowed well and showed your feelings and emotions, nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

Olive_8
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since 2003-09-20
Posts 41
Canada
9 posted 2003-11-03 10:54 PM


One word.....oh wait, two words, absolutely wonderful!!!!
Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
10 posted 2003-11-04 06:46 AM


Thanks everyone! I'm glad you liked this.

"Cut my life into pieces, this is my last resort."~PaPaRoach

xtel
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since 2003-11-02
Posts 16

11 posted 2003-11-09 12:12 PM


I really liked your poem.
It somehow describes me and the boy i love because i still don't know if he wants to go out with me.
~Good writing.

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Beneath the northern stars
12 posted 2003-11-09 09:30 PM


That was really good. It's hard when someone else doesn't know what they want and leaves you hanging, but you're handling it well. I hope it all works out!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

Spine Grinder
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Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
13 posted 2003-11-10 10:59 AM


Thanks again everyone, your replies are much appreciated.

I soak up all the pain, and accept it in silence~DMX

monkey
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Posts 27

14 posted 2003-11-14 02:17 PM


great poem, i can relate to this poem and your expression was great too!
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