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wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06
Posts 215
yakima wa

0 posted 2003-11-02 05:52 PM



I am scared of you
because you want so much of me
and i can't give it to you

You don't want the best for me
you don't care about me
you want what I can give you

I can only give you my heart
but you take that so easily
you place into your hand and break it

I wanted you
you said it would be different
its not, your the same

My varsity basketball player
you want the points
thats all you want

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

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CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA
1 posted 2003-11-02 06:54 PM


Mal, I'm sorry guys treat you the way they do...  I'm always here for you, you know that.  If there's anything I can ever do to help, feel free to talk to me.  This was a good poem, though, thanks for sharing.

- C.K. Natland -

Nobody Is Perfect Until You Fall In Love With Them.

xtel
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since 2003-11-02
Posts 16

2 posted 2003-11-03 07:34 AM


I think that it's a good poem...
I'm in a situation a bit like that actually

xte|

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since 2003-01-03
Posts 696
washington, USA
3 posted 2003-11-03 08:03 PM


I'm sorry that you have been made to feel that way hun. Nobody should ever feel like giving there heart isn't enough or that what the person wants is not what you want to give them. Anyways the poem was well done. Seemed to stutter in a few places meaning by that, that the flow seemed to break but other than that I really enjoyed the piece nicely expressed emotion.
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
4 posted 2003-11-03 08:27 PM


Too many guys are like this atleast at my school, but I get the feeling they will probably never change, maybe cuz they have hurt me one too many times, well I really liked this poem showed your emotion well

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

Olive_8
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since 2003-09-20
Posts 41
Canada
5 posted 2003-11-03 11:14 PM


I know the feelin and it is good that i can have something to read from someone that is goin through the same thing, but it sucks cuz we are both in a pretty bad position!

~*Everything will be ok in the end, and if it is not ok, then it is not the end.~*

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