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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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...Coming to

0 posted 2003-10-29 12:32 PM



Im getting lost in this
it's slowly taking control
I wish I could leave it all behind
but where can I go to escape reality?

This pain is too deep
to focus on anything else
this truth too black
to lose myself.

If I could see the future
would I find enough hope
to continue on,
or would it be the end of me?

My dreams of late have been haunted
always the imprint of you
I couldn't escape these feelings
even if I wanted to.

A shadow is following me everywhere
calling my name
and taunting with beautiful promises
that bring tears to my eyes.

It's offering all I've ever wanted
but does it speak truth?
It's offering all I've ever wanted
but with a price.

This is tearing me apart
this is a choice
that I've always known the answer to
this is a choice
that I can't make.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

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Silent Evincar
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since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
1 posted 2003-10-29 01:56 PM


Indeed the truth which none of us can ever hope to truly answer. It burns, that question and at the same time it will fuel or ambition for better or for worse. I find this to be very good and I hope everbody reads this. They don't know what they're missing.

          NJS

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2003-10-29 02:00 PM


Thanks you ever so much for that reply, it means so much to me. I was unsure if anyone would like this one.
Thanks for reading.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

frolicking dolphin
Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
3 posted 2003-10-29 03:30 PM


I liked this one too, especially:
"This pain is too deep
to focus on anything else
this truth too black
to lose myself."

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

4 posted 2003-10-29 05:14 PM


good onnnnnnneeeeeeeeeeee
*Belabebeautiful*
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since 2003-01-03
Posts 696
washington, USA
5 posted 2003-10-30 01:02 AM


ahh WinterWren...It is nice to see and old name still lingering around here. As usual I enjoyed your work although I have a preference of other pieces this one was in no way any less of quality. It had beautiful emotion and a silent yet strong message, wonderfully done as usuall.
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
6 posted 2003-10-31 03:26 PM


I liked this, it hada great flow to it. It was  bit vague, but still quite descriptive at times. overall, I liked it.
~Lex

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
7 posted 2003-11-09 08:45 PM


Yo dogg. Great poem...adding it to my library.
monkey
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 27

8 posted 2003-11-09 08:47 PM


Yo dogg, ignore that last post, I forgot to log off your screen name and back into mine! Everything I said while under you're login name still applies! Still a great poem and still adding it! Ooops!
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