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smalltownmind
Junior Member

since 2003-10-24

Posts 21

0 posted 2003-10-27 02:08 PM

last night I had a dream.
a comet was going to hit the earth.
i had only a few precious hours to live.
what should i do?

i stood and gazed a while
at the vast wonder that would
soon destroy life as i knew it.
and dreamt of better days.

i laid in the grass
focused on that mass of rock and fire...
i began to weep. there's more to life
than what i have accomplished.

i watched the rock...coming to kill
i watched the rock...miss us by only a few miles.
life was saved once again...only then did i realize
that death is not a choice we make.

i awoke feeling greatful, yet saddened.
there was more i could do.
so many things left to experience.
more that i could feel...

take no moment for granted...you never know when it's your last...maybe i'm just preaching...but it was a feeling i'll never forget.

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-10-27 02:13 PM

good write. ......

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

2 posted 2003-10-27 03:36 PM

I really like the message sent out by this one, nice write

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

3 posted 2003-10-28 09:59 AM

You know what, I've always liked this idea of pondering what we would do when the world is over. This is what I have to say about it though, be more complex. It's too easy to just slap down some tears and remembrances of our life and what we should have done. Let your soul scream onto the paper and feel that possible situation of hoplessness and then write about us learing to not take for granted. I do like this piece so don't take this the wrong way and I am in agreement with you. Bravo.

NJS

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-10-28 11:32 AM

This is a very good poem...very thought-provoking. It's something we all should think seriously about, for we never know when will be out last day. I enjoyed reading this.

Hugs

Ethel

my_lost_soul
New Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 6

5 posted 2003-10-28 12:57 PM

nice poem..great message=)

LiL-Jew
Junior Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 30

6 posted 2003-10-28 05:51 PM

The message is really awesome and straight forward. I was thinking about suicide when you said that death is not a choice but then again if you think about it suicide is death, your leaving yourself no choice but killing yourself so that doesnt really count. but then again death is a process of life you just have to go through the physical form of it first.

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