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Barbara
Junior Member
since 2003-01-24
Posts 32


0 posted 2003-11-01 08:29 AM


Take me back
to happy days of summer.,
to end of primary school.
Bring me days of sunny glitters
and rainbows on the sky.

PLEASE take me back!

Bring me back this days,
the days of my innocence
and take me back in your arms.

Show me again those
massages taht you wrote,
take us to together road..

Please take me to
our first date,
oh please to this day
of 15th June..

Bring me back this summer days,
oh please be mine.

Turn the hands of time
and come to me again.
Please sit on my bed
and show me love again.

PLEASE take me back!

Bring me beautiful moments
just of us being together..

Tell me again how you miss me..

PLEASE take me back!

Oh please be again
the shoulder when I cry
and make me happy
when Im not fine.
Oh please be mine!

HEar those
sweet words you said,
and dont forget.
Me.

PLEASE take me back!

Please erase this
9th September,
when rain was falling more than ever
and I could sleep.
The day you told me
love just isnt there anymore.

Erase this 8 weeks of sadness,
long days of October..
oh how I wish November wouldnt come..

Please take me back to your arms
where sun always shines!


(please tell me what you think.... :/)



© Copyright 2003 Barbara - All Rights Reserved
dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-01 11:43 AM


many wishes.....turning back time.....hopelessness.....good write
peachesNcream
Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
2 posted 2003-11-01 01:39 PM


This poem reminds me of myself, except for different dates! LOL. It's nice to know other people have the exact same feelings as someone else. Thanks for the read! Great work! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York
3 posted 2003-11-01 02:07 PM


Barbara,
This is graceful, I remember wanting to go back to when I was younger, I think we all want that, but is it all that worth it? after everything that we have overcome and accomplished in life?

                   Love,
             xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
*My poetry website
http://www.freewebs.com/poettree/

cherrys_rule
Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

4 posted 2006-06-18 10:15 PM


Ok i might just be mean, but i didn't even read this poem, and see... you might love a guy or a girl, but you should never feel so desperate to get them back. If they want you back they'll get you back. Don't do that to yourself. I'm sure your poem is great but I just feel pitty for those girls and guys that just don't give up there partner, even though they broke up. I think it's kindda sad personally. I'm sorry that I seem harsh, but i'm in that mood. DON'T ASK!
the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
5 posted 2006-06-19 12:55 PM


ok.. I liked this.. I liked how you set it up.. I can see how this seems desperate and stuff but it seems to me that this is about wanting someone back so bad.. Most people who are desperate just aren't in love but to me this poem shows how much you care and love that person still so I don't think there's anything wrong with saying please take me back.. now.. I wouldn't myself, go to this person and beg for them to take me back but to tell them how you feel.. that's something you have to do sometimes. Great job on this poem..

my favorite lines would have to be...

"The day you told me
love just isnt there anymore."

they just kind of spoke to me.. they are beautiful to me.. great job again..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Frank W. Torres
Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133

6 posted 2006-06-19 06:50 PM


I liked your poem. I can dig it.
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