»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #7
»
Worse Than Worse
| Teen Poetry #7 |
|
Worse Than Worse |
|
|
CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA 
|
Hey! This is Cody, I'm back from my 3 month absence, I've missed it around here. I've noticed a lot of you are new around here, so you don't know me. But yeah, I'm Cody. It's good to be back. WORSE THAN WORSE I feel so empty Being poured from And empty jug Yet I'm full... I need somebody to Love me, But could I be loved more? And I feel so... I dont know... so alone But this room It's full of people n o i s u f n o c Taking over I know just what I need It may be you. Still, it may be me... I need someone to know me To feel for me... What I can't feel myself Tell me what I'm doing. Wrong. Or right. I can't tell which is which And it seems to me It's worse than worse - C.K. Natland - |
||
| © Copyright 2003 C.K.N. - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
good write.. and welcome back  |
||
|
dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
good onnnnnnnneeeeeeeee |
||
*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Yay!!! Your back!! You have been gone for so long, I missed you! Anyways on to the poem. I really liked it. I don't know it seemed very hazy and confused but at the same time it was so perfect that way. I'm not sure if that makes sense but yeah I liked the line breaks and punctuation, it added to the confused effect of the poem and yet was not distracting to the reader. Overall nice job and I'm glad you back!  ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
