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Silent Evincar
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0 posted 2003-10-21 06:57 PM



I hold onto my precious consciousness
cradling my face in my lowly hands.

The scarred fingers hardly knowing the sight of my eyes
covering them still as a broken shield.

Tears scorn my flesh while igniting my inner fury
slowly waiting to erupt upon an unknown entity.

Searing as they are I cherish this rare moment
a time when I can fully let go to salty discomforts.

But now is not the time for pity to absorb my face
nor the calloused palms to engrave my skin.

It is a preparation of the future to come in the instant
once I decide to grow, seperate forever from these hands.


© Copyright 2003 Nicholas Stauffer - All Rights Reserved
garysgirl
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1 posted 2003-10-21 09:46 PM


Searing as they are I cherish this rare moment
a time when I can fully let go to salty discomforts.


Nicholas, what a well-written poem this is!! And,
a good cry does seem to cleanse our inner hurts, sometimes.
Hugs  
Ethel

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2 posted 2003-10-21 10:26 PM


this was a grate expression of true feelings the description and progression was grate, looking for more keep righting

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

dertah
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3 posted 2003-10-22 12:34 PM


yum salty discomforts...i like salty.  hmmm, but i was never one for the hands, i always buried my face in my pillow soaking it with tears.  good write.
Peeps-Peter
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4 posted 2003-10-22 07:17 PM


deep. A really well done poem, I really loved the detail. sweet.
~Pete

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