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Deep_Inside
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2003-10-20 02:51 PM



What happens
after the fun

What happens
after it's all done

When the party is over
and every one has gone home

When the party is over
and I’m all alone

I stand alone
in my room

I stand alone
I see my doom

He is here
I must go

He is here
my fear i dart not show

He said
don't ask how

He said
it's all over now

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

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dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-10-20 06:46 PM


good onnnnnnneeeeeeee.
Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
2 posted 2003-10-20 08:03 PM


I liked the beginning of this piece and the end kinda gave a "door closed" feel to it. Short and simple works sometimes too, good write.

      NJS

~*DrAgOnFLY*~
Junior Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 29
Haven of Abyss
3 posted 2003-10-20 08:20 PM


like omg i love it!!! sometimes the short stuff just wont flow right, but yours is like a river! so->o good. and, as always, it makes me think of someone...
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