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Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

0 posted 2003-10-19 12:47 PM



Escaping my eyes,
Flowing softly away from me….
Are they tears of regret,
Or just pure pathetic ness?

Nothing works anymore,
Apparently, I wasn’t meant to be…
This isn’t the end,
Its merely thy beginning…

Is there a place where I shall be safe?
Under wings repaired….
Holding me tightly,
Never letting me go.

My  everlasting feelings,
Is like a rose.
Once magnificently beautiful,
Now withered and dead.

Rush past me,
Forget of my existence…
You are living your life with wings of your own….
While Im temporally helpless,
Mine shattered, Once you decide to walk through me…

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

© Copyright 2003 Delaniie Quirk - All Rights Reserved
magic_612
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since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
1 posted 2003-10-19 09:14 AM


very good work.. I especially really liked the last line.
Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
2 posted 2003-10-19 10:40 AM


I enjoyed the reference to the rose and blooming as well as dying away. No wings left of your own and all you can do is hop up and down and hope to catch a breeze. Interestingly put together.

        NJS

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

3 posted 2003-10-19 10:48 PM


hmmmm, i seem to have a problem with anger.  good write by the way.

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