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fallen_star1715
Junior Member
since 2003-06-25
Posts 18


0 posted 2003-10-18 05:38 AM



My life u wrecked
its now destroyed
You messed with my heart
like it was a toy

Why must you do it
again and again
now my soul
will never mend

Your always hurting me
for what....??
love

I knew love hurt
but not this much
then u tell me ill miss your touch?

You say you have the world
on ur shoulders
i tell you its not
its just way ur carrying it

but why??
why do u take it out on me??
its jus not fair
obviously this isnt meant to be

You treat me like this
i want to runaway
but u tell me
i want to go inland
to the closest bay

Why is life so hard?
why does it make us cry?
Why do we always seem to pic the wrong card?

I always screw up
because of u
jus leave me alone
and please just go home!!!

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Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
1 posted 2003-10-18 09:23 AM


The wrong card indeed, perhaps it is the deck then the card in essence. I liked the questions, they just feel the need to be answered and not subdued with petty statements. Very nice.

          NJS

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
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2 posted 2003-10-18 09:48 AM


You really wrote a lot of emotion out in this poem. If it's from your own personal experience, I do hope that things are better about the situtation soon.
Hugs to you  
Ethel

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

3 posted 2003-10-18 03:01 PM


hmmmm, destroyed.  good onnnnnneeeeeeee.
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