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Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
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the unknown realm of insanity

0 posted 2003-10-17 01:17 PM



The way you look at me,
The things you whisper in my ear...
Sometimes allows me to fear,
The end of you and I even coming near.

Holding me in your arms,
Seeing the expression of eternal adorement in your eyes.
Slowly does it hurt me,
To hide within my lies.

How would life be,
Without you there to complete me...
Do you understand how I feel,
Can't you look through me and see?

Relying upon my patheticness,
Bashes me to the edge of my own insanity,
I cant stand it any longer.
Emotions engraved into me,
Retells how far my hopelessness can wonder...

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

© Copyright 2003 Delaniie Quirk - All Rights Reserved
dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-10-17 02:19 PM


sweet!!!!!!!!!!
Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
2 posted 2003-10-18 09:47 AM


Perhaps it isn't hopelessness but rather the strength that some aren't willing to set forward. What's commendable about this piece is that the problem is right in front of your face and the option is too painful. So we continue to wonder into hopelessness. Nice.

        NJS

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2003-10-23 12:21 PM



Great job on this, Delaney.
You've expressed these feelings very well.
I enjoyed the read.

~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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