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Teen Poetry #7

never thoughts

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-10-15 04:19 PM

i never thought the darkness would come again, rising in my breast,
i never wanted to close my eyes and let my tears stream.
Hidden in my closet so none can hear my quiet, anguished screams,
staring darkly at the imagined creatures that put me to the test.

i never wanted to push play and let depression be my best,
i never thought the days to come would interest me,
always trying to make a slow even more agonizing,
for isolation in my head brings a cold emptiness in my chest.

change the brought by a      y crest,
i make out the sound of like a choir,
and end is approaching like the coming hour,
when it arrives, i wont be counted among the blessed.

nothing is so frightening to a human's chest,
as the things unknown to us, things beyond life and      ,
things that disturb us forever and steal away our breath,
but to me, the fear and     ly ignorance is held in my breast.

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

1 posted 2003-10-15 06:32 PM

Sitting in a closet is freaky enough but hiding everything in your breast could cause some major insanity issues. I liked how this one built itself up to the ending and the intensity in the begining was nice as well. I would say good job in french but I forgot how.

NJS

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

2 posted 2003-10-15 10:01 PM

ooohhhhh, chilld up my spine.....good job.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2003-10-15 10:01 PM

thanks alot for the comments, i really like it!!

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