Almost There - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-10-15 06:46 AM

I’m halfway –
To where I don’t want to be.
I’m halfway –
To complete insanity.

Leaving nothing behind,
I take what’s left of me,
And run as far away –
As my legs can carry.

I’m halfway –
Down a road I know is wrong.
I’m halfway –
In woods where I know I’ll get lost.

I’m fighting back the tears,
That threaten to escape,
And I’m running from the voice –
That echoes from the past.

I’m halfway –
From leaving all that behind.
I’m halfway –
Through with forgetting you.

Only Halfway….

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

1 posted 2003-10-15 10:31 AM

Staci, I REALLY liked this one. But there was one thing that tripped me up...some of it has a rhyme scheme and some of it doesn't...it was only like the last two stanzas that don't. I was just wondering about that...either way, this poem's REALLY great. I really like your use of vocab. Nice work! Loves.

*I figured out that trust was just my one mistake...*

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

2 posted 2003-10-15 12:07 PM

hmmmm, half way is better than me. in fact, i think i've regressed. good write.

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

3 posted 2003-10-15 03:22 PM

I really liked this one, great job!

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2003-10-15 04:22 PM

this one was a good diea, the rhyming pattern threw me off as well.

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

5 posted 2003-10-15 06:21 PM

Being only at the half way point seems more frustrating then starting or ending. At some point we make another decision to regress or pull forward. I feel the emotion in this piece and like all others you write I do enjoy this much.

NJS

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

6 posted 2003-10-15 07:50 PM

I agree about the whole ryhme thing. This was really good! Yes, I think the halfway point is more frusrating/harder to deal with than the beginning or end. Great work, this is def. one of my favorite by you! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

7 posted 2003-10-15 08:04 PM

Actually guys/girls, the rhyming was NOT intended lol, it just ended up like that. so yeah..lol

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.