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OtherSideOfTheMirror
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0 posted 2003-10-02 05:58 PM



She eats kiwis in the dark on friday nights
with a spoon
Paints herself a world her own, lacking grays
lacking shades
She likes the cocoa mix straight without liquid
loves the rush
she wears a hat to sleep because her ears get cold
hides her eyes with it
She wears gloves in the public pool
cuz she can't see why not
No one understand why or how
This ordinairy girl's turned upside-down
But she loves being
So perfectly ordinary.
So secretly extraordinary.
Such a beautiful mixed-up girl.


i love it! i dono if it makes sense to you, but sometimes ya just gotta love the crazy things.



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shara
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since 2002-05-21
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1 posted 2003-10-02 06:40 PM


beautiful mixed up girl, that was good, sometimes it is a good thing to be different, if everybody were the same, this woud be a very boring place. thanx for the great read. be blessed and keep writing.

   ~sha-sha
      
                                 

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2003-10-02 08:25 PM


I really like this one, its'different.
I can really relate it though.
I love the ending. The whole thing!
Excellent job!

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

Silent Evincar
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since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
3 posted 2003-10-02 10:28 PM


Crazy things huh?? Well its all those things that really scare me. It was nice and different, lets hear it for gloves in the pool. Whoo hoo!!

    NJS

magic_612
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since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
4 posted 2003-10-02 10:47 PM


very original.. and I love the title. Great job!!
dertah
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since 2003-06-18
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5 posted 2003-10-03 12:54 PM


ahh yes the finer things in life.
aaron woodside
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since 2001-09-26
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6 posted 2003-10-03 02:34 PM


Hey Cassi,

I liked this.  It's got an interesting concept and reminds me of that one song...the one that talks about the girl being the queen and only drinking coffee when it rains.

Glad to see your still here.  

ex animo,
Aaron Woodside

p.s. quit stalking me

They say the sweet is never as sweet without the sour.  So where's my sweet?

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 245

7 posted 2003-10-03 04:05 PM


hmmm stalking eh?

lol all those things are things i do that i love. i have this crazy cool hat and matching gloves and they are probably the finer aspect of my life as a whole.

love you all thanks for your replies

-cassiopeia

p.s. aaron... :-P

overtyoureyes
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since 2003-10-03
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8 posted 2003-10-03 07:36 PM


great concept (unique!), love the title... aren't we all beautiful mixed up girls?

p.s. try adding some alliterations in that form of poetry, it'll create a more melodic rhythm...just a suggestion!

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