»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #7
»
Miss You
| Teen Poetry #7 |
|
Miss You |
|
|
BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
I miss your eyes, the way you looked at me. I miss your smile, the way you said my name. I miss your strong arms, the way you held me tight. Most of all, I miss your heart, The way you once loved me. --- I know this is short, and I don't think it's very good, but I've been stuggling with writer's block, and it's all I've been able to come up with. Forgive me. Jen All I can say is never give up on love. [This message has been edited by BrokenDreams (10-02-2003 10:18 AM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Jennifer Rick - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
shara Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 69florida/USA |
noneed to apologize, we all struggle with writers block, i liked it though, it reminded me of my high school boyfriend-the way he said my name, i adored him, keep writing and be blessed. much luv ~sha-sha |
||
|
Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Hmmm writers block huh?? Well while I don't agree with you saying it sucks I do have a lonesome comment. The last line as much as it tries to end the poem, doesn't. Maybe it's the flow or it just seems not fit entirely. Oh well, we'll throw that out to writers block. Overall nice job. NJS |
||
|
magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
awww so sweet. I understand what you mean about the writer's block, I've had it for months now. I just can't seem to get what I want to say out on paper.. you know? I really liked this one though, good start to getting back into the swing of things  |
||
|
dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
i dont think theres anyone in here that doesnt miss someone. i think that can tell a lot about our generation. good oonnnnnnneeeeeeee. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
