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Evie
Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15


0 posted 2003-09-30 11:24 PM


I cry now that you're out of my life
I cry that this time has gone by
I've lost the strength, the energy to fly
I ask God over and over why
Why you were taken away?
While you're out of reach
I can't touch your precious face
The memories cannot be erased
I still think of you when I'm in this place
You've disappeared without a trace
And life is hard for me to face
These tears of being without you
Flood my life and bring me pain
I loved you so endlessly
You were a blessing sent from Heaven to me
And now I feel like I've lost everything
It's hard to breathe in this air and sing
Without you right next to me
Your smile and your voice
Always took hold of me
You were the King and I was the Queen
And I thought you'd never leave
But now it's just a fantasy
No longer a reality


Tiffany Evangeline

[This message has been edited by Evie (10-02-2003 09:56 PM).]

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shara
Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 69
florida/USA
1 posted 2003-10-01 12:14 PM


you want my honest opinion...this poem rocks
I liked your choice of words...keep up the good work.  thanks for the great read, be blessed.

sha-sha
      

Deep_Inside
Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding
2 posted 2003-10-01 02:18 PM


this poem had a good topic and described the feelings really well. but i didn't like is that much where was a place that i had to struggle to read it felt like i had to read that same thing twice other than that is was good. keep righting
peachesNcream
Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
3 posted 2003-10-01 08:58 PM


JEEZ! You couldn't have written this any better. It's like you were reading my mind! This poem was absolutely beautiful. GREAT WORK! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

Jordyn05
Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 62

4 posted 2003-10-01 09:21 PM


This is is amazing. keep on writting.
Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
5 posted 2003-10-02 02:29 AM


The pain in this piece is beautiful, that may sound weird. Okay, the way it was evaluated and put into words is heart warming. It is on the other hand tragic, heaven sent and already sent away. I hear your cry, and keep up this work. Probe your mind.

           NJS

BrokenDreams
Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
6 posted 2003-10-02 10:21 AM


I swear, this could have been written about me. I'm in like the exact same position right now, losing the one I love with all my heart. I hope things turn out okay for you. This was well-written. Thanks for the read.
Jen

All I can say is never give up on love.

swinging2bbvd
Junior Member
since 2003-10-02
Posts 14

7 posted 2003-10-02 12:54 PM


i liked it, reminded me of one i wrote long long ago. love, when born, is a beautiful thing, it becomes such a curious thing, and enevitably a dangerous thing, but when its over its hits you, its an imaginary thing! love is a word made from every emotion. you hit quite a bit for such a short peice. good job, keep expanding your creativity, and dont stop writing!
Evie
Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15

8 posted 2003-10-02 10:01 PM


Thanx 4 all the replies muh guys & gals, you're da best!  Yep, I'm gonna keep writin' fa' sho', u can count on me....writing's muh passion without a doubt.....holla at your gurl anytime, just hit on the "e-mail Evie" button at the top...I'd love 2 hear from you....I'm out!  God bless, don't ever hesitate 2 fly!

"WE NEED 2 NOT WORRY ABOUT THE PAST, BECUZ IF WE IGNORE THE FUTURE, IT WILL BECOME ANOTHER PAST THAT WE WILL GREATLY REGRET...." ~Tiffany Evangeline*

Tiffany Evangeline

[This message has been edited by Evie (10-02-2003 10:03 PM).]

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

9 posted 2003-10-03 11:55 AM


ha ha (i laugh like frech man).  sometimes a part of the past is all we want.  excellent poem.  ahhh memories...
monkey
Junior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 27

10 posted 2003-11-13 07:02 PM


this was an excellent poem! great choice of words indeed, y did you write this? what were you inspired by?
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