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Teen Poetry #7

red-hued ruin

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-09-28 04:27 PM

red-hued ruin

im tired of
tired of darkness
but again and again
i slip into the red night
The stars are
A different hue here
The moon rises
and stays for my duration
Every person looks
Just like you
They stand stone faced
looking for more hearts to tear
I trudge up to your home
only to find that its torn down
only memories are left on the ground
soaking up the bloody rain
Ruined forever are my hopes
The dreams that stayed in me
were crushed that day
along with the house
you smiled when you
watched the wrecker move into position
you laughed at the destruction
the total end of me

Why
Junior Member

since 2003-09-26

Posts 32
Middle of nowhere

1 posted 2003-09-28 10:52 PM

great work, i dont really know what to say. besides that its going in my library

Poems free us and trap us all the same.
But still they put our hearts at ease.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2003-09-29 01:33 PM

very dark but good write. well done!

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2003-09-30 11:21 PM

thanks guys, im going for darker ones these days...

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

4 posted 2003-10-23 05:07 PM

smiling.....destruction....i like how those words seem to go together. good write.

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