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sunshinemc Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 27 |
As my mind races through a state of anxiety My body turns chill Thoughts of worry and regret Asking myself "is this forreal?" We meet eyes You turn quickly to avoid confrontation I stay looking deep Trying to find a loop hole in your imagination My soul burns with agony and my heart aches with pain After all that has happened Im amazed im still sane Sometimes through the day, I loose track of thought Reminiscing on the laughs and tears Remembering everything were not My bodies left empty yearning for you All thats left is to fantisize Is that you feel the same way I do |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Sounds as if you may be a bit overwhelmed as well, kiddo....Great write! |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
this was an ok poem. the only thing i didnt like was the "is this foreal" thing, it just didnt seem to fit for me. good job otherwise |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
the forreal thing got me to this was ok. but remember the more righting you do the better you get soooooooo..... keep righting |
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Why Junior Member
since 2003-09-26
Posts 32Middle of nowhere |
That was a very beautiful poem. I once felt the same way.Keep posting |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is really great.... im going through that right now and that has summed up my feelings exactly... keep it up.... you got heaps of talent. aussie teen |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
im about there now. |
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