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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-09-22 06:52 AM



Pretending to be Nothing.
Mask the entire Soul.
Surprised by complete Evil.
Depression causes Wounds.
Love turns to Hate.
Pain tears Apart.
Insecurities lead to a Façade.
Hide all Secrets.
Downfall with utter Shame.
Memories continue to Haunt.
Fear of the Darkness.
Forsaken with own Insanity.
Suffer to Cry.
Anger with such Scars.
Insomnia means no Nightmares.
Quote:
”Never Sleep, Never Die.”

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

© Copyright 2003 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
young_blood
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Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2003-09-22 09:14 AM


this one had alot of cool imagery in it, i just found it hard to follow.it seemed to have jumped around alot.
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2 posted 2003-09-23 01:49 AM


As usuall I enjoyed your work, deep and intense overall forceful message and meaningful write. The word choice was wonderful and the imagery was excellent I was a little confused with some of the lines though, this one for example "Forsaken with own Insanity." Who's insanity yours or mine? I don't know it just seemed a little out of context. But as a whole another beautifully done piece here.
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
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Lost and Broken
3 posted 2003-09-24 07:42 PM


Ooo, I ESPECIALLY loved this one. I really liked how you didn't really use complete sentences...it was just fragments, I thought that was awesome. Loves.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
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Australia
4 posted 2003-09-27 06:14 AM


nice quotes.... linkin park and evanecscense...
this is great... lots of jumping between emotions and forms....
keep it up...

Why
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since 2003-09-26
Posts 32
Middle of nowhere
5 posted 2003-09-27 11:55 AM


beautiful....i have never read anything like it keep writing more like this.
Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2003-09-28 01:38 PM


Mask the entire Soul.

especially like this line Stac.  Was just listening to Linkin Park this morn...
nicely done ...

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
7 posted 2003-10-02 06:53 AM


Thanks everyone. I'm glad you liked this. Your thoughts are appreciated.

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

8 posted 2003-10-23 05:28 PM


never die!!!!  oh yeah....im feeling all sort of highlander.
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