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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-09-22 06:45 AM



Argument after argument,
Will it ever end?
Some say,
Once you love someone,
It’s forever.
Do you believe that?
Or was it all a lie?
A cover-up –
To once again,
Twist me around your finger?
Pillow soaked –
By these nightly tears,
No sleep again tonight,
My mind is too afraid…
Because your face still
Haunts me in my dreams…

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

© Copyright 2003 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
young_blood
Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2003-09-22 09:13 AM


this was ok. ive read alot of poems that are the same idea as this. it wasnt bad at all, it was just kinda mediocre.
Olive_8
Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 41
Canada
2 posted 2003-09-22 07:01 PM


Dude I totally loved your poem!! I can definitely relate. When I read it, it totally hit me, made me realize that sometimes things just don't work and we needa move past them, no matter how hard it seems at the time.
sunshinemc
Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 27

3 posted 2003-09-22 10:00 PM


Good write. I can relate definetely.
<3 sunshinemc

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
4 posted 2003-09-23 01:25 AM



Staci...some painful emotions in this,
but you've expressed them very well.
Nicely done.
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
5 posted 2003-09-24 07:40 PM


OMG, Staci, that was amazing. It couldn't have hit closer to home. I loved it, as I do all of your writing. Awesome...Loves.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

6 posted 2003-10-17 05:17 PM


hmmm, true true.  
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