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young_blood
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0 posted 2003-09-21 04:32 PM



Just irony

notes are scattered across the room
ive been tearing through these papers for some time
ive searched in my cabinets, drawers, under my bed
for the words i knew were written.
every letter was filled to the brink with love
the words brought me up each day
now i cant even read the notes
the ink has begun running down the pages.
funny how you wrote me in red pen
because the wet ink now drips like      .
its staining my carpet and pooling on my bed,
so i lay face down on my sheets for reflection.
the crimson puddle is tinted with
old memories that replay like black and white movies.
i lose track of the time
the flashbacks come more quickly.
how many hours have passed?
not that i would move even if i knew.
soon the pictures fade to a solid black
ive lost conscience and fallen into darkness.
death follows closely like a child to its father
but      's sting is far worse than a child's scream.
did you somehow foresee this?
you knew this was going to hapen, you prayed for it.
what type of ink did you use?
one filled with all the hurt and pain ive caused you.
im sure that this is humorous to you
and that you find it to be Just Irony.

© Copyright 2003 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
skyshine
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1 posted 2003-09-21 04:50 PM


That's very powerful. Old memories and words can be incredibly painful. Try not to dwell on them and you'll find strength in that, so one day they won't kill you. Hope things look up soon!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

dinky
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2 posted 2003-09-21 09:07 PM


hey
this was realllly good
keep postin
~sam~

young_blood
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3 posted 2003-09-22 08:25 PM


thanks for all the feedback guys, i will continue to post for sure!!
sunshinemc
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4 posted 2003-09-22 10:29 PM


That was awesome!  You have a good imagination ...hope things look up.
<3

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5 posted 2003-09-23 01:59 AM


Very powerful. My favorite from you so far I think. Such an intense emotional read its almost draining the emotions are so vivid and pained. Such a perfectly painted canvas of words, lovely job
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

dertah
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6 posted 2003-10-17 05:11 PM


good onnnnnneeeeeeeeee.
kissa~rachelle
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7 posted 2004-02-16 01:57 PM


This was really powerful. I dont know if this poem is actually something that happened, but if it did, im sorry. You must have caused her al ot of pain huh. Till next time.
~kissa~

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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8 posted 2004-02-16 04:57 PM


I'm glad to see this back up again....

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

young_blood
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9 posted 2004-02-16 09:17 PM


i'm glad to see it back up too. actually she caused me alot of pain. darn     s
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10 posted 2004-02-17 02:59 AM


heh, just as powerful and touching the second time around...
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

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11 posted 2004-02-17 08:09 AM


You have captured pain in your words.  You have made it easy to look through your mind, to wander through your brain and understand.  Congratulations.  
young_blood
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12 posted 2004-02-17 02:55 PM


thank you, thank you. i only post here cuase of you guys. so thank you again.
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