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Inspired-8
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since 2008-04-14
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Pluto

0 posted 2008-12-01 03:36 AM



Dark despairing
No end in sight
Vindictive comparing
Useless to fight

All the feelings
Wounds of the soul
Never knew healing
Exacting blind toll

Alone among masses
Strayed for so long
Forbidden trespasses
For want to belong
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AcousticPen
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since 2008-12-01
Posts 13
Florida USA
1 posted 2008-12-01 04:21 AM


Although I dont fully know the depths your poem refers I really can feel some of the emotion being expressed. I love your 4 line stanza style that I myself employ. And I think that for you to convey what you are so well, while still rhyming ABAB, is very impressive. Im new so I cant wait to read some of your old (and new) works!

-Scott Vukelic

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