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pyre
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0 posted 2008-11-17 04:46 PM



I love
And I don't know how to prove it
The world rotates
Around me
Without me

I want my love to be free
This carnality in me
Words in vanity
Why don't you love me

My divine destiny
And "loser" spoken over me
Breath of the clergy

I just need the voice of Jesus
To be honest
The truth
Of home

She's quiet
And she's waiting

Does she pray?  Am I prey?  The strength of reality demands honesty and this path is in a shovel...

© Copyright 2008 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
RMelick
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since 2008-11-16
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1 posted 2008-11-17 06:18 PM


Would you be open to some advice for this poem?
pyre
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since 2008-05-16
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2 posted 2008-11-22 03:23 AM


yes. always.  its actually a song, but advice is always welcomed.

Does she pray?  Am I prey?  The strength of reality demands honesty and this path is in a shovel...

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