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GothicCherry
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0 posted 2008-09-16 08:42 PM



THAT FACE, THOSE TEARS,
MY LOVE, AND FEARS,
THEY’VE ALL INTWINED THROUGHOUT THE YEARS.
A ROSE, A DATE,
MY DEATHLY FATE
HAVE ALL BEEN CAUSED BY LOVE AND HATE.



© Copyright 2008 Michaela J. McHone - All Rights Reserved
Saya_lost_soul
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1 posted 2008-09-16 08:57 PM


This is an nice poem...I can still remember feeling the very same.

<love is but a dream>

Dark Icy
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2 posted 2008-09-17 06:44 PM


This is extremely true. I know how hard it felt, relationship after relationship. You really caught those feelings in words very nicely.
midnightdreamer
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3 posted 2008-09-17 06:55 PM


great poem. great emotion.

midnightdreamer

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axi
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4 posted 2008-11-18 10:43 AM


love the title and for the lack of lines in the poem, it drives the point home so quickly...love it
XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland
5 posted 2008-11-22 12:12 PM


perfect flow to it. Great write.

{~~*~~}

Miss.Emmalee

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The Esoteric Being
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6 posted 2008-11-22 10:57 PM


much passion for few words, nicely done Cherry
GothicCherry
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7 posted 2008-11-23 03:25 PM


Thanks to you all!! I was hoping using only a few lines would be better for the flow and dramatic point of the poem. Y'all have proved that it worked. I am very grateful for your comments.
what_hope?
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8 posted 2008-12-13 12:18 PM


love it is a nice rythm skime and cleverly described


pandabear
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9 posted 2009-03-09 11:42 PM


WOW YOUR BEYOND GOOD!!!!
GothicCherry
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10 posted 2009-03-10 09:24 AM


lol Thank You pandabear
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11 posted 2009-03-10 01:57 PM


Brevity is a good thing!  You have sent a strong and clear message to your readers in few words very well.  I find it easier reading in upper and lower case though if I may suggest that to you.  I sent you a little something too.
GothicCherry
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12 posted 2009-03-10 02:02 PM


Ha! Yea if I would have even noticed I had caps lock on when I wrote this. Lol...
wolfy09
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13 posted 2009-04-24 02:25 PM


OMG i LOVED this poem!
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