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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2008-09-08 03:24 PM



so
I decided
not to let the hate take over
to ignore attempts
at making me feel
discarded.
So what?
You said yourself
you didn't love me
and from there
emptiness
resolve
and then
a vain attempt
not to notice the scars
from all the time before
when my anger at you
was turned on myself.

© Copyright 2008 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
pyre
Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136

1 posted 2008-09-08 10:14 PM


Sounds like it would cause a scratch here and there.  The debris of corrupted affection does make nice poetry though.  Nice write.

Does she pray?  Am I prey?  The strength of reality demands honesty and this path is in a shovel...

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
2 posted 2008-09-09 02:49 AM


i really like your style, i am definitely gonna check some more out!

no messing around with length, yet really getting the feeling across

x

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
3 posted 2008-09-09 01:42 PM


Thanks again! This isn't the best have since I am out of practice, but its great to get such a reaction to what I do have.

"...buried way beneath the sheets
I think she's having a meltdown..."
"Buckcherry"

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