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Death watches |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
You were there when I was born You were there when I turned 3 You were there when my sister left You were there when I turned 6 You were there when I started school You were there when I turned 9 You were there when I moved away You were there when my niece was born You were there when I turned 12 You were there when I went to Jr. high You were there when I turned 13 You were there when my heart broke in two You were there when my sister was arrested You were there waiting for me to give up You waited for me to say “End this life!” You waited for me to do suicide You waited for this life to be to much for me You waited but never got anything Not a thought of suicide You tempted me but it never worked I won’t listen I won’t give in I’ll tell you now I’ll live this life till it ends Beware Death is watching Beware Death is near Death is something I don’t fear Death is waiting for you "It was heaven........right in the center of hell" Bella from New Moon |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I liked this, but think the repetition isn't necessary for them impact of the poem.  "...buried way beneath the sheets |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
I enjoyed the repitition....tho it could have been less cluttered. |
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