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angelfacegurl Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 67Swartz Creek, MI 
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as days go by i wonder why you hurt me like u do becuase i cared for u when u hold me down as my face begins to frown you tell me its alright your to strong i cannot fight i try to hold back my tears and try to fight my fears when i feel your present in my body you say dont tell noone can stop me my thoughts are racing with your face in facing you think its a game but this time your to blame when u get up and walk out i dont make a sound not even a shout then i begin to weep and cry myself to sleep and hope this is the last time that u do this horrible crime but when my tummy starts to swell i hope this time u burn in hell when you made another part of me theres so many things mom just cant see so now 6 months along im becomming not so strong so when im lying im bed thinking of the things i should have said i hear him comming down the hall and my name he begins to call when he walks in my roon man this next time has came to soon then i stand up this time i got this strong feeling in my gut i grab his troat and wont let go this time i will say no as his body begins to tremble and fall to the floor i notice not breathing this moment i adore then i walk away from him knowing that it will never happen again i might go to jail but i knew this time i would not let myself fail now ill leave this house in no more fear no reason to cry not even 1 tear |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I really like this though to me the second part seemed a bit to sudden. Remember that it's okay to make your poems as long as it takes to get the story out. Great write, and I'm here for you if you ever need to talk. {~~*~~} "You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.." |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
great write. midnightdreamer "It was heaven........right in the center of hell" Bella from New Moon |
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Abbeon Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 228Curiousity, and wonder |
Wow, Actually, this was more than words can describe, And if you ever need to talk, i can listen. Rebecca The hollow emptiness, the crazed thoughts left to survive |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I like Forever Broken's comments. This could easily be a bit longer and it would flow more meaningfully toward the conclusion with a little tweaking. I have no idea where the inspiration for such a write comes from, and I am mortified to think it's from experience. But even as a guy, I can tell you, you are not alone. I am a survivor. And with time, an overcomer.But there has been a long, ugly road in between. I almost didn't make it. But I am still here. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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