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XGarapanX
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0 posted 06-21-2008 08:55 AM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX


My first ever clumsy attempt at a sit-down poem. I'd been doing poetry tag for a few months and decided I liked writing. It's based on a girl I met online, a poetess, who considered herself a "Vampeel", one who feeds on energy rather than blood.  

ADrEaMoFDaRkNeSs

Entering the mist of night,
Dark woven shadows...
A panoply
Of unseen shrouds,
Like curtains of unlight
Which trap the thoughts
Enrapturing the mind
Within a veil of hidden sights,
Exposing every sense
To dark unknowns,
Brushing on the soulish realm,
Begetting only terror
And paralyzing fright.
.
By touch alone
This iridescent light,
A promised thrill,
A wistful whim
Is aptly known
Evoking every flavor
Of tantalized delight.
.
With the spirit sense perceive
A chill sensation,
Dark sweet passion
Winding tight
Like silk from widow weaved.
.
Transformed by predilection
To an eerie selling
Of the soul
For shaded promise
With temptations vague.
.
With pensive heart receive
The souls delight
A dream of shadows flickering,
A dream elusive
In it's mocking flight
A dream of darkness.......

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

© Copyright 2008 ·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`· - All Rights Reserved
Again
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1 posted 06-21-2008 05:48 PM       View Profile for Again   Email Again   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Again

Hey this is a great read. Nice job for your first poem. Please write more. I know what you mean about not writing for a while or ever for that matter. I stopped writing for a while and became rusty, the first one is always the hardest. Good job here.
XGarapanX
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2 posted 06-21-2008 08:44 PM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

Thank you, poet!

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

midnightdreamer
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3 posted 06-28-2008 07:13 PM       View Profile for midnightdreamer   Email midnightdreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for midnightdreamer

i liked this. great write!

midnightdreamer

"It was heaven........right in the center of hell" Bella from New Moon

XGarapanX
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4 posted 06-28-2008 08:02 PM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

Thanks. Midnight D.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

A Romantic Heart
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5 posted 07-04-2008 04:27 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Patrick,

This was brilliant...loved it!

going to read more in here of you
i_am_patch!
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6 posted 07-04-2008 04:58 AM       View Profile for i_am_patch!   Email i_am_patch!   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for i_am_patch!

you have that special gift of writing dark poetry, this one captivated my inner fears.
great theme..fresh idea. good work.

   "omnia vincit amor"
LOVE OVERCOMES EVERYTHING

XGarapanX
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7 posted 07-04-2008 07:23 AM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

Oh, wow...

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·
BrittanyJ
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Wow...i agree with everyone else, this is really good. And u say it's your first? Wow again...nicely done Hope to see more soon

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

XGarapanX
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9 posted 07-04-2008 12:31 PM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

Thank you Brittany. Yes, it was my first non-improv poem, the first I'd deliberately set out to write with a mentally rehearsed theme. I'd been writing strictly improv's in poetry tag settings for around 4-6 months before this. Glad you liked it.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

hunnie_girl
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10 posted 07-04-2008 11:20 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

Brett this was great.. it reminds me something my buddy Paul would like... ahh Patrick... ohh deer which name do you perfer??
Krysti
XGarapanX
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11 posted 07-05-2008 12:27 AM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

I am called both Brett and Patrick, Krysti. Either is fine. I'm pleased that you enjoyed this.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

A Romantic Heart
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12 posted 07-05-2008 03:07 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

You are posting your best poetry in here...

people in open don't get to see it...

but I am glad I did!

keep writing...and remember you can email me if you need me
XGarapanX
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Thank you so much, for the friendship and the kind comment both, Romantic one.

It's actually a little sad if I consider the idea that my best poetry is pain and darkness, lol! (No reflection upon your comment, which I take fully for a byte of praise, well meant.) Thanks again!  

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

maddorani
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14 posted 03-31-2011 07:24 PM       View Profile for maddorani   Email maddorani   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for maddorani

omg i loved it
XGarapanX
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15 posted 03-31-2011 10:19 PM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

Love yours more!

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

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