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voice2bheard
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0 posted 05-02-2008 09:12 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

She wears everything thats in style

I see her laugh and want her to stay a while

I hear my voice before I think words "Shes beautiful"

My mind is very confused, I'm not sure what to do

When I'm around her, I know I don't want to act like a fool

When I walk to class I think to myself,"Shes beautiful"

The jewelry she wears a nice bright gold

Her voice when she sings

The only words I think are " Shes beautiful"

Her eyes shine in every light

I wish I could be there tell her goodnight

A whisper in the wind "Shes beautiful"

The way she makes others feel when shes around

Its like spirits are lifted, your floating on a cloud

When you close your eyes, you still see her face

Gods precious creation all over the place

A day with her will never be dull

You look in her eyes and say " Shes beautiful"

Kate

© Copyright 2008 Kate - All Rights Reserved
voice2bheard
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1 posted 05-02-2008 09:18 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

This poem is about a  friend of mine.

Kate

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2 posted 05-02-2008 05:22 PM       View Profile for shattered-smiles   Email shattered-smiles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shattered-smiles

That's so good!  I can just feel the emotion in it.  I would suggest changing the rhyme scheme and the format but the initial idea of the poem was really good.  If every girl in this world could hear she was beautiful, that would make such a big difference.  Great poem though, I believe this girl would be very happy if you gave this to her.  Awesome work.

TJ

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

voice2bheard
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3 posted 05-05-2008 01:24 PM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

Thanks I'm really glad you think so and this want a poem made for a girl but also for every girl in the world because they deserve to be recognized and appreciated.

Kate

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4 posted 12-16-2009 04:09 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

YOU MIGHT LAUGH AT THIS BUT THIS WAS WHEN I FOUND OUT THAT I LIKE GIRLS TOO!! NOT JUST GUYS!! YES EVERYONE I'M BISEXUAL!!

Kate

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