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masksrlife
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0 posted 2008-04-23 02:55 PM


(this really wouldnt make sence at all but i'm feeling so alone and in pain right now so i just wrote stuff down. sorry)

They all walk by, wondering why?
Wondering why she does this to her self
why she hurts her self so bad.

Wondering why she leaves those wicked scars.
Wondering why she slashes her wrists and arms.
Wondering why she trys to leave the world, all
alone.
Wondering why she leaves those bloody marks,
on the ice cold floor.
Wondering why she cry's a river every night
because she lost her one true love.
Wondering why..is she still alive.
Wondering why she wounldn't just die, and put us all out of her painfull missery.

So they finger that razor resting peacefully in there pocket, draw it quietly and peirce her in the heart.
So stunned that she falls to the cement and leaves a pool of blood on her chest they take off.
They can't handle the thought of jail, the thought of being away from there family.
So they also leave the world, so quick and so quietly.

[This message has been edited by masksrlife (04-23-2008 07:51 PM).]

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midnightdreamer
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1 posted 2008-04-23 10:26 PM


good poem! sad but great.
midnightdreamer

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XxForever.BrokenxX
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2 posted 2008-04-24 06:26 PM


so, so sad. but i love it all the same. Great job,

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Desirer4New
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3 posted 2008-04-24 09:11 PM


i love the beginning really good.
masksrlife
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4 posted 2008-04-27 03:59 PM


Thank you guyz! really appreciated

*-crazycece-*

Gurl_unknown_11
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5 posted 2008-05-17 10:16 PM


whoa,i really like this poem. Eventhough you just wrote things down it dosnt seem like it,i can feel the emotion in it.

AWESOME


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6 posted 2008-05-18 10:52 AM


Wow.. This is just amazing. Its sad and yet the poem is really good.

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

masksrlife
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7 posted 2008-05-18 01:46 PM


Thank you guys very appreciated.

*-crazycece-*

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