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Dark Poetry #4

Poor Little Man

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

0 posted 2008-03-31 09:33 PM

Poor Little Man

upon shards of memories
tired feet slowly drag
naked and stumbling
mumbling and weeping

aww, poor little man

pathetically holding on
to his dead life like
a faceless doll
to dance with

Yoin

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

1 posted 2008-03-31 10:26 PM

Something in this piece just spoke to me... Very good.

TJ

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

eternally_singing
Member

since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

2 posted 2008-03-31 10:33 PM

extremely well done!

At night a candle's brighter than the sun

Reborn
Junior Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 13

3 posted 2008-04-01 07:43 PM

i can picture a high class woman with a fan saying this while looking from her balcony down upon a poor man walking by

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

4 posted 2008-04-01 08:26 PM

this could perfectly describe guy I met the other day. nice write

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

5 posted 2008-04-02 10:06 PM

thank you all for your kind words

Yoin

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

6 posted 2008-04-04 03:19 PM

a ghost in life..wow I loved it

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