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wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
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the last place on earth

0 posted 2008-03-04 05:39 AM


It needs a lot of work but wanted to shear this one.



it started with a scream
a shout in the street
this is my life pounding the beat
alone I run what is the story
just a bunch of boys after a thugs glory
more shouts and screams echo the alley
my duty is to lead these boys to the gallery
the fight goes on only minutes have passed
this time I'm out numbered
the odds ten on one
then comes the bang and a blazing flash of light
here comes my judgment will I die this night
feel the searing lead tearing flesh from bone
and now I lie bleeding, heart fading, I'm dieing alone
I lie there in the street this alley of my demise
no one to help at the hands of those i despise
at first they are stunned
it's just another street brawl
to me this is life
my life walking the streets
am I to die at only *****
one lets out a cry
there more of them coming,
I hear the sirens now
lift my head and mumble
do you know why
then with out a second thought the cowards turn and run
the only thing beside me is that b****ards gun

then conciseness leaves me I awake in a room of white
machines beeping and buzzing around me
blood pressure, morphine, heart rate
then a nurse begins to shriek
oh my god he's awake.  

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XxForever.BrokenxX
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1 posted 2008-03-04 06:49 PM


yeah i'll admit it needs some work but either than that, it's good. The last stanza ecspecially. Good job,

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wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
Posts 224
the last place on earth
2 posted 2008-03-10 03:21 AM


thanks

something thats stupid but works isn't stupid

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