»
Archives
»
Dark Poetry #4
»
Spoken to Shadows
| Dark Poetry #4 |
|
Spoken to Shadows |
|
|
Lunar_Plague New Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 4ND |
Spoken to Shadows Save me, Restore me, Destroy me, Kill Me. Not Life, Not Death, Not Light, Not Dark, but Peace. I want the darkness to leave me alone, And let me suffer in my own wallows. Purge me of Life, Kill me eternally. Judge me not of Man, But as a Black Beast. Vicarious in efforts, Your wills shone, So willing to face Death to aid sorrows. Face not a creation of Divine Hand, Of blackest constraints and eternal pain, Feel no sympathy as blade cuts through bone; Such thoughts will certainly cause your demise. Send me not to the Heaven’s Promised Land, The Kingdom that looked down to me in vain. Be blinded not by their bold conviction, They seek my death; all else are only lies. Believe that the Bowels do not want me, Trust that the Heaven’s will for me atone, Know that my words are of black, tainted voice See that I am Key; Vengeance instrument. But Blood and Shadow are Mine to withhold, Joy, Love, and Faith all die by my black hands. See flames of hatred flicker in my eyes, As I see vile existence of Mankind. My blood boils red liquid stone but is cold. Heart beats nevermore; Hatred’s reprimand. My own mind toils with blurred visions of lies, Seeing not my kin, but the darkness’ blind. Deliver from this darkness: Sanity. Save me, Restore me, Destroy me, Kill me. I am Divine Light; The Dancing Shadow. ~ Lunar Arca |
||
| © Copyright 2008 Max Courneya - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Lunar_Plague New Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 4ND |
I have three poems that are actually monologues from a short story I wrote. I hope they dont' break any rules, because they are spoken by the antagonist as he struggles internally with his emotions. Any feedback is welcome and I hope this is a productive first post! |
||
|
Broken Toy Junior Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 18ThatSmallWorldCalledInsanity |
That was good, the use of language clearly expresses the inner turmoil your character experiences. The fist line is a good introduction to the feelings and confusion, it takes you straight into what will happen, the lines that follow expand on their reasoning and grab anyone reading. The references to Heaven and the afterlife suggest only one course out of the dilema as was suggested in the opening line. As a first post, I found it good, though since this is my first, I may be going easy on you. Keep up the poems in my mind, if your others are as good as this one, I can't see a reason for any complaints. |
||
|
Lunar_Plague New Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 4ND |
Thanks much! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I am Divine Light; The Dancing Shadow. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
