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dragoon
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since 2008-01-09
Posts 19


0 posted 2008-01-14 11:45 AM


Is it ok to post songs like this one?Let me know.
(3rd and 5th verse pick up dramatically on instrument)Might be hard to read as the instrument is the punctuation, so read each line separate but they bind together loosely.
    
      Thoughts of You

Went out walking this morning
cold wind numbing my hands
Nothing much to do
early winter in this town still stands

Thoughts of you
passing through my mind
Our eyes not meeting
I've seen you but you still blind


Everyday I've seen your face
Never had I wanted to feel this way
Still trying to leave this place
I gotta get away

Winter skies and the pond has frozen
Thoughts of you
passing through my mind
Walking off and my mind goes blind

Body's numb and I can't breathe
looking at the sky through this ice
never had I wanted to feel this way
Sinking to the bottom in this place

I gotta get away

Thoughts of you
passing through my mind
My eyes frozen in this time
I've seen you but you still blind

I gotta get away

Thoughts of death
passing through my time
Your eyes frozen on my mind.
Body's numb and my mind goes blind.
I gotta get away

© Copyright 2008 dragoon - All Rights Reserved
Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24
Posts 387
Oregon USA
1 posted 2008-01-14 11:31 PM


No matter the format it was still a really great read.
Twilight Warrior
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since 2007-02-22
Posts 106
The World That Never Was
2 posted 2008-01-15 08:30 PM


This was a really good read. I didn't really know which format you were talkin' about, but I  really felt the song.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

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