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voice2bheard
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0 posted 2008-01-08 10:47 AM


I guess it seems that anything I do now doesn't matter

Like I'm a living lie, thats been told so many times

A heart that beats just to be there

My eyes to see and noone cares

I feel all alone, its dark and cold

My shadow is the only one that follows me home

My bodys here, but my mind isn't

So far away, distracted, and lifted

Why can't I live a better life

To be in this shadow, cold as ice

The wind that blows me anywhere

No place in the world, because noone cares

How can I live my life everyday like its my last

If every word thats been said comes back to haunt me, my past

When I want to move on, be strong, and laugh

Do I belong here? or noone cares

Kate

© Copyright 2008 Kate - All Rights Reserved
voice2bheard
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1 posted 2008-01-08 10:48 AM


I really had to express myself with this one and it hurt

Kate

KatKali
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since 2008-01-03
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Where the wispers grow louder
2 posted 2008-01-31 11:12 AM


I really relate to your poems they are very beautiful, it put me in a daze, like a void sucking me in so I can't hear. Which is very good cus a poem put me in a daze so I decided to join so I could be put in a daze again and again by lovely poems.

Dark,
What does that mean?
Light,
What makes you so good?
Sin,
What is my Sin?
Only when you answer the first two will
you find the last.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland
3 posted 2008-02-01 06:19 PM


Yes i agree, and I can also relate. It can be hard to believe that someone really cares. I can't give u any advice because honestly, I ALWAYS feel that way. But the best thing for me, that helps i mean, is just being around my friends. Friends that might possibly care a tiny bit.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

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4 posted 2008-02-01 10:58 PM


this is VERY good. I love how it ended although it was a little sad but its very good. i understand how you feel. I've been there, but dont u think that everyone has been there at last once? i think so but very good otherwise
midnightdreamer
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5 posted 2008-02-05 11:22 PM


i know how you feel and i relate to this poem in so many ways. I'm only 13 but i know that feeling and i've been there and i really was wishing that i could just disappear. At that point i couldn't take it and almost ran out the door. i remembered that if i did then I wouldn't have anywhere to go because of how young i am and that i wouldn't get very far before some one realized i was gone.
Midnightdreamer


jvj-003
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since 2008-02-05
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INdia
6 posted 2008-02-06 04:59 AM


being lonely is a great misfortune for many.... but what happens when you come to know that being lonely is another way of getting a blessing... u r feeling lonely because u r assuming urself to be so... and if you just look out into another way of living life..u will feel happy that u r lonely..... confused ha?? hehe this is from another person who has done the same kind of ordeal as yours...and for that reason...I have a POEM as an answer to this.... which I will post soon...
JVJ

God gives and forgives, we get and foget

voice2bheard
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7 posted 2008-02-06 10:31 AM


thank you

Kate

jvj-003
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INdia
8 posted 2008-02-08 12:01 PM


I have tried to reply to your lonliness by means of a poem posted by me titled " Feel a pain you will feel a life"

!!!!

God gives and forgives, we get and foget

effjayel
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At the Crossroads of Infinity
9 posted 2008-02-08 01:56 PM


Kate

Some people DO care, unfortunately too few feel able to express themselves until it is too late.....

Mystress May
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10 posted 2008-02-20 11:19 PM


Kate..... I adore your words and I adore you!
voice2bheard
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11 posted 2008-06-13 09:20 AM


I know people feel like that but overall I'm glad you guys love my poems makes me write more!!

Kate

PoetsPlay
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since 2007-12-22
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California
12 posted 2008-07-20 12:02 PM


I loved your poem! I can really relate to it, I even have a song on my ipod that is called No One Cares by Atreyu. I think all of your poems are works of art.

Alexandra

voice2bheard
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13 posted 2008-08-12 09:06 PM


Thank you poets of play I'm really glad to know that I have fans like you, thats what keeps me writing is when peoplel like you love my work so thanks!!

Kate

voice2bheard
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14 posted 2009-12-16 03:59 AM


A TRUE EXPRESSION!! LOVE MY WRITING!!

Kate

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