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The_Nameless_One
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since 2007-01-20
Posts 165
Missouri

0 posted 2007-12-27 07:27 PM


Laughing,playing,having fun
It's all good until you lose someone
The pain is so deep it hits you at the core
Leaving your heart cold and sore
Sorrow for all the times you missed
Making you angry with yourself, you become p!ssed
Blaming yourself for having no control
While visiting their grave on a lonely knoll
You sit and cry for just a while
Remembering days when you were vile
Wishing you could take it all back
The guilt leaves your heart with a crack
Never quite knowing if you were forgiven
Or if they even made it into heaven

[This message has been edited by The_Nameless_One (12-28-2007 03:10 PM).]

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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2007-12-31 01:17 AM


You sound good.  You sound like a coward, and this is not an insult.

-GIS

I am Happy me...

Twilight Warrior
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since 2007-02-22
Posts 106
The World That Never Was
2 posted 2007-12-31 12:58 PM


I really felt the flow from this. Nice write.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

The_Nameless_One
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since 2007-01-20
Posts 165
Missouri
3 posted 2007-12-31 02:10 PM


please explain how feeling remorse and sadness for losing someone you love is cowardly
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