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wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
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the last place on earth

0 posted 2007-12-19 06:11 AM


it is a warm summers day
you can even smell the hay
birds are singing, bees are buzzing, its the sound of paradise
enjoy the air as the kids sing and play, this world it knows no vice
then I come across a sight no one should have known
in the backyard of a family home
i saw, hanging from a tree
a child of only three

something thats stupid but works isn't stupid

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fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09
Posts 257

1 posted 2008-01-02 12:05 PM


Nice write, That's why I wrote a poem including you in it.
Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24
Posts 387
Oregon USA
2 posted 2008-01-02 10:42 PM


As I started reading this poem I wondered what was so dark about it... until I reached the end.

Very good, you set up the reader for a fall that you do not see coming.

I liked it.

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