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RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-11-08 07:07 AM



Suicidal Angel…


Its only once you tell yourself, I’ll only bleed for a while
But the truth is my dear you can’t keep hiding behind your smile
The cuts are getting deeper and you know I know it too
You cannot hide the scars now and I don’t know what to do

You place the knife against your skin hoping it won’t hurt
You dig it in deeper and watch the scar that’s being burnt
The blood keeps oozing out as you hold a tissue to the cut
You know you did the wrong thing, but you can’t feel it in your gut

This is where I find you, wedged against the door
I can’t help but cry myself cause I’ve been here before
Your big blue eyes are crying cause you can not take the pain
We have to find a way to help, the pathway back to sane

Please stop crying now it’s over
Just rest your head upon my shoulder
Watch those deadly dreams float away
Let your body move in a rhythmic sway

The blood will soon stop oozing and the pain will slowly fade
The wound will heal over, now that arrangements have been made
The years have come and gone; you’ve got scars to prove it all
It’ll be a long winding road, but you’ve got no further left to fall

There’s no reason for these lacerations that will forever haunt your past
It’s now time to put down the knife and seek help very fast
Hell You’re no angel, but you do have an angels face
now you’ve lost your innocence, and fallen down from grace

© Copyright 2007 A Typical Aussie Chick - All Rights Reserved
Mystress May
Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296
Taunton, MA
1 posted 2007-11-08 07:56 AM


My best friend is a cutter.... it's definately not easy to watch someone you love hurting themselves.

In the last four lines, it seems like you rushed the second and third ones. Otherwise, I really like it. And find it to hit a very personal note.

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

GothicCherry
Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471
TN
2 posted 2008-12-16 12:25 PM


"There’s no reason for these lacerations that will forever haunt your past"

I was a cutter for three years until a few months ago one of my friends finally let me cry into her shoulder for three hours on her birthday. She told me about GOD and now I am so much better off then I have ever been before...This line really explains the way I feel now very well. Every scar I see now haunts me. It's a scary thought, but it's true. NO one can hide from the things they have done to escape their lifes.

GothicCherry
Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471
TN
3 posted 2008-12-16 12:27 PM


I forgot to mention  in the last comment, but I have read a couple of your more recent works and, though I truly enjoy this one, you have possessed a better use of words over time...All your poetry is amazing.
angelfacegurl
Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 67
Swartz Creek, MI
4 posted 2008-12-17 11:05 AM


i can relate so much im addin this to my lib its one of the best poems i have read in a long time and i respect you for speakin of this.
thanx

britt


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