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CAR CRASH

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voice2bheard
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0 posted 11-05-2007 10:41 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard


This poem is based on real events:

Today wasn't the best day for me,

I'm about to tell you something you won't believe

today I got in a car crash

and right before my eyes, a light flashed

the moment went so fast and quick

it took me a while to really know this

I got in a car carsh today

and it made me realize theres things I have to say

I don't want to leave, I'm not ready to go

theres still things everyone should know,

I love music, I love to sing,

there worth more to me than a diamond ring

I love my friends, wouldn't be here without them,

my family also, wish I realized it back then

to the boy I've known for so many years,

last night for you I creid so many tears,

when I should look in your eyes

and say that I love you

because I've known for so long that it really is true

so don't go on throwing your life away

because little did you know, there was something to say,

live for right now and not the past

because for all you know, today could be your last

Kate

© Copyright 2007 Kate - All Rights Reserved
Seeker72
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1 posted 11-05-2007 10:56 AM       View Profile for Seeker72   Email Seeker72   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seeker72

I liked this one.

While your other poems are good, they don't really have a darkness to them but this one has an undertone to it.

There is flesh in this one, have you thought about making it longer?

You have a lot to play with in a poem like this one.

Good job V2B.
voice2bheard
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2 posted 11-05-2007 10:59 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

thanks this was so real and unexpected it just happend
Mystress May
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since 10-25-2007
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3 posted 11-05-2007 09:09 PM       View Profile for Mystress May   Email Mystress May   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mystress May

hey doll... I really like this one a lot.

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

voice2bheard
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4 posted 11-07-2007 09:09 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

thank you!!!
voice2bheard
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5 posted 12-16-2009 05:13 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

AND BY THE WAY YES THIS WAS REAL!!

Kate

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