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A WHISPER IN THE NIGHT

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voice2bheard
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0 posted 10-26-2007 10:49 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard


Its eleven at night, and I can't sleep

I'm thinking about you, you're all I see

I look out the window, the sky dark and clear

thers no shooting star, to wish you were near

I open the door and feel a rush of cold air

smoothly goes by me, but noones there

I go outside, but theres no light

I wrap my coat tightly around me, on this freezing cold night

I walk in the road, following its path

then something gets a hold of me, tightly grasped

its just the wind, I say to myself

as I turn around, and theres noone else

I continue to walk, since theres noone I know

but feel someones still following me, a haunting shadow

please leave me alone, just go away

as I look all around, thats all I say

and as I start to head back home

I still feel that I'm not alone

and as I lay down, I say goodnight

a whisper "I love you", then turn out the light

© Copyright 2007 Kate - All Rights Reserved
voice2bheard
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1 posted 10-26-2007 10:50 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

This poem was about a dream I had don't know exactly how I wrote it?? I started out writing it, but then it was as if, something took over me and starting writing itself??
Hope someone likes it??

midnightdreamer
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2 posted 07-22-2008 11:35 PM       View Profile for midnightdreamer   Email midnightdreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for midnightdreamer

ok. i know this was posted a long time ago. but who wouldn't want to read this!!!???? it's amazing! Great work!! i know its like you start out writing but in the end your not the one writing
midnightdreamer

"It was heaven........right in the center of hell" Bella from New Moon

marcel
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3 posted 08-04-2008 09:55 PM       View Profile for marcel   Email marcel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for marcel

creative piece of writing
Seeker72
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4 posted 08-05-2008 12:00 AM       View Profile for Seeker72   Email Seeker72   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seeker72

Hey V2b.

I really liked this poem, it felt a little stuttered in parts, almost like you lost the flow of your dreams thoughts.

Still a damn good read, but you might want to go through and sharpen the edges a little.
BeyaK
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5 posted 08-08-2008 04:54 AM       View Profile for BeyaK   Email BeyaK   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BeyaK

I really like reading this one. Nice job!

voice2bheard
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6 posted 08-12-2008 09:01 PM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

Thanks you guys this poem was one I wrote when I first started writing glad you like it and thanks for the advice!!

Kate

Revon
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7 posted 08-29-2008 09:52 PM       View Profile for Revon   Email Revon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Revon

I loved this poem. Enjoyed reading it
racer-boy
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8 posted 09-02-2008 01:58 PM       View Profile for racer-boy   Email racer-boy   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for racer-boy

that must have been a trippy dream lol

live now

Temptress
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9 posted 09-08-2008 03:01 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

I get those feelings sometimes...most of mine are from some connection with someone I love.

Enjoyed

"...buried way beneath the sheets
I think she's having a meltdown..."
"Buckcherry"

voice2bheard
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10 posted 10-27-2008 08:47 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

Thank you all for loving my work!!

Kate

HeliaHeart
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11 posted 11-26-2008 06:55 PM       View Profile for HeliaHeart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HeliaHeart

Oh this was good! Very nice and creative piece of literature...

~Lia
"Live as if you were to die tomorrow, Learn as if you were to live forever"
-M. K. Ghandi

GothicCherry
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12 posted 11-26-2008 07:43 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

This is very pretty and flows wonderfully. Love it!
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13 posted 11-27-2008 09:38 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Oh wow!! I had the whole thing pictured in my mind and the ending just scared the crap out of me.. lol  Great write!!

-Zach

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

voice2bheard
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14 posted 12-16-2009 03:54 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

of course one of the many favorite of my fellow poets!!

Kate

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