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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2008-02-20 03:26 PM


Spiritual lethargy
Corrupt perversion
Disobey me control me contort me
Empty my heart of love and desire
Satisfy me with blindness
Pagan soul

Suicide holds the water at bay
Jesus, I heard you
What did you say
Suicide holds the idiot's hand
Jesus, I heard you
What did you say
Suicide won't take me away
Jesus, I heard you
What did you say

Life inside my night
The words juice and flow
Truth deliberately in denial
My throat hurts from the sickness
This disease of love tearing a Hole
In my skull

Fillets of me
A true capitallist does intriguing
A selfish man trapped in himself
Let the worms eat him
Affectionate passionate desire for prominent power
Little fish, regurgitate that fake bread




© Copyright 2008 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
Mystress May
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since 2007-10-25
Posts 296
Taunton, MA
1 posted 2008-02-22 06:44 PM


Craig..... I love it!

My favourite line is 'Truth deliberately in denial' .... it strikes a chord in me.

Had you considered the word 'false' instead of 'fake'? This piece doesn't seem to have a lot of harder letters.... you seem to have stuck with the softer sounds, so it may give it a smoother flow?

~~~May~~~

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2008-02-26 10:30 PM


No I hadn't considered using 'false' instead of 'fake.'  Maybe I should have...  

Thank you.
-GIS


eternally_singing
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since 2007-12-18
Posts 123
PA, United States
3 posted 2008-03-01 01:39 PM



“Suicide holds the water at bay
Jesus, I heard you
What did you say
Suicide holds the idiot's hand
Jesus, I heard you
What did you say
Suicide won't take me away
Jesus, I heard you
What did you say”

Very well done! Thank you for sharing.

At night a candle's brighter than the sun

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