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trUstNooNe Member
since 2006-05-21
Posts 91 |
Tempted bu this world we live in, I can't stand and watch my hopes and dreams get thrown aside for something i dont want. My heart is there please dont lead me to dispair. Somethings missing but I cant explain what that is. Im still not well, things still dont make sense. My friends I poured my heart our too arent here and neither are the cuts I made. They both have faded away. Im alittle more grown up, i handel pain, hurt, scaring in a completely different way. Somethings tugging at me to throw it all away, but I cant let it leave me. Its got to stay with me. The way Id be with out my pain, it wouldnt be me. I love my pain and it loves me. It comforts me when no ones there, it gets me through those hard nights. I cant explain it and I wont try. I dont want to find someone to understand, I want to keep it to myself. Ill bare my pain because that just what it is, Mine. |
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nicole leigh Junior Member
since 2007-09-19
Posts 44Eau Clair Wisconson |
very good |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
I liked it. It's raw and honest, but if you want it to read well you really need to sort out the punctuation and spelling, while I can read it I also correct as I go along. You don't want anyone doing that as it takes away from what it is you are trying to say. You want them to be engrossed with your writing, not engrossed in correcting what you have written... if you know what I mean. As I mentioned, I liked it, it was really good. |
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