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Sir_Vampire
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since 2007-06-12
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0 posted 2007-08-28 03:30 AM



Lightning rips through the darkness with his crooked smile
A family of rabbits huddles closer in vain
Their attempts of comfort are futile
Thunder rolls chasing the lightning playfully

Closer still the huddle still in vain
The silence stalks after these play mates
These takers of lives these changers of fates
Another blinding flash!
Another Deafening crash!

Of this game they never tire
Lightning strikes a willow tree setting it on fire
Once a happy home for birds now their funeral pyre

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

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Sir_Vampire
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since 2007-06-12
Posts 96
Johannesburg
1 posted 2007-08-28 03:31 AM


was just trying something different with this one, was giving nature a darker view to its normal grace, hope you enjoy...

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

Tears-of-Sanity
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since 2007-09-05
Posts 121
Kingdom Hearts
2 posted 2007-09-09 01:09 AM


To imagine lightning as darkness even though it is light…

I really liked the poem.  It had a lot of meanings and I can imagine a part of what made you think of lightning as darkness…  or maybe I misunderstood it to explain my own point of view :P  
Anyway, you write good poetry ^^'
Hope I read more soon

Tears of Sanity

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