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Yoinn
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0 posted 2007-08-16 07:00 PM


The Dance

With far to much effort
and little music in my life,
I struggle to make
my staggering
look like a dance.

Yoin


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2007-08-17 08:28 PM


Welcome to Passions, Yoin.

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2 posted 2007-08-17 09:04 PM


very nicely done. short and sweet. I liked it a lot. Welcome to Passions. I hope you enjoy it here. Great first post
Krysti

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moondogz
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3 posted 2007-08-18 07:00 AM


Very interesting poem, really paints a
picture of what it's like to "try and pull
it off." Thanks and welcome.

Twilight Warrior
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4 posted 2007-08-18 10:20 AM


Nice one.....effort.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2007-08-18 10:04 PM


Awesome brevity...clear
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6 posted 2007-08-19 11:19 AM


Yoinn... Breathtakingly tight... Bravo!
Yoinn
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7 posted 2007-08-19 12:43 PM


Thank you everyone. What a great poetry website this is!

Yoin

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