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Seeker72
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0 posted 2007-08-09 12:34 PM


I'm not too sure about this one but I'll throw it out and see what you think.


DRUG OF CHOICE


Slipping into the fabric of your life

It sits so silent you could almost miss it

If not for the words from others

Telling you it is there

So dark of the heart do you think it all innocent

So ignorant are they that think you a fool

Think you weak

So strong you are

In body

So weak of mind

So believing of your own words

So bitter do they cast them upon you

So right?

So wrong?

Is it that none of us see the woods for the trees?

Once we take our drug of choice

Our drug with no choice

A poison of the body and mind

A savoir to the soul

A demon in disguise

An Angel on your shoulder

With every bottle finished
A miracle with every pill taken

As innocents looks on

Days blur together

Creating a hideous mask of reality

Unable to contain

Unable to fathom

No longer willing to believe

Does it matter?

When the world is living in such darkness

Does it matter our outcome?

We live

We die

In the not too distant future we are forgotten

Silently rolling over our ash ridden hills

A park

Or favorite football field

Some like to be pumped with chemicals

Dumped with a rose in the earth

A sort of life eternal

Rotting over the centuries

As above turns to Hell

So below

The drug of choice

It matters little at the end of the day

The words spoken to cast out the demons

Create a world all their own

The words spoken create the demons

Create the Hell

Like a homeless man drifting in an ocean of sour smells and empty bottles

Every bridge their home

Every person their lunch

Their booze

Their drug of choice

One eyed dogs stare from silver surrounds

On a shelf

Their tale untold

You wonder sometimes

What happened to the eye?

What happened to your eye?

Where did you lose it?

Why did you let it go?

As you make tea and cover shingles in tar

You wonder what became of you

Sitting high on a roof top

You smoke and wonder

When did you let your soul get off the train

When did you say farewell?

Sitting in a room with the TV telling you how crap the world is

You often wonder to the younger years

So full of promise

You thought the world need look out for you

Now many years on

You hope you can spot yourself

In the mirror in the morning

You hope this day will not be your last

As you embrace your drug of choice

So selfish

So misunderstood

So ignorant of it all

Voices tell of better things

They also tell of can openers you use without your hands

Music from your younger days bring back the spark

Until the traffic report tells you of a crash on the bridge

Waking every day thinking this is it

The last

That pain down the arm

The tightness across the chest

Death wants you

Up on a roof you wonder

What would be said when you finally died

It is human nature to forget the evil

The general misdoings of a person

Once they are dead

It is almost a Get out of jail free card

Never once confessing your sins

Never once have being a sinner

Yet accused of it

Looked upon as one

It matters little

Once you are dead

Like your accomplishments

Like your drug of choice

Like your failures

Sitting on a roof

As the sun shines

Taking the final step

Wondering what was going to be for dinner

Staring it in the eye

As the world rushes to meet you

While you take you drug of choice

© Copyright 2007 Christopher Duncan - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-08-09 01:31 AM


this was long, but amazing. I really liked it. My only recommendation would be that you take out the astricked profanity. Using astricks in place of a curse word, even part of it is against the guidelines. But as for the message in this....fantastic.
Seeker72
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2 posted 2007-08-09 01:53 AM


Word removed.

Thank you for your input... sorry about the rule break.

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3 posted 2007-08-09 09:25 AM


hey that's cool, it happens, just glad you removed it, I would have hated to see this get pulled for the one thing, ya know?
BrittanyJ
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4 posted 2007-08-09 10:26 AM


Another beautiful piece...i think this one was my favorite

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

blue face
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5 posted 2007-08-09 02:00 PM


truth spoken once again
nice poem and
hope to read more
sarah


Seeker72
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6 posted 2007-08-09 05:44 PM


Thank for your comments guys and the info Sea, I wouldn't want to see a poem removed for breaking the rules.
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7 posted 2007-08-09 08:46 PM


Christopher,
May I say that as long as this piece runs, it's part of what makes the point of the piece. This is well done as it provides the perception of drugs ruining a life time and not being just a short time exciting activity. Well done and thanks for making this conform to the guidelines so it is still here.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Seeker72
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8 posted 2007-08-10 12:07 PM


Thank you for reading Larry C.
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