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Losing It
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Losing It |
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MindBeyondBody Junior Member
since 2007-08-02
Posts 14Florida,United States |
i wish you could see the world from my eyes, the world is a cruel place filled with death and demise, i can hear the cries from starving children in my head, coming home to nothing but water and stale bread, so hungry you cant even go to bed,all i see is blood red, i feel like I'm losing my mind,I'm so confined,i feel like i was left behind i wish i was blind,so i couldn't see the evil of mankind, kids growing up with no father or mother,why do we kill each other, i wish you could feel my pain my brother,but i have to walk this path alone kids growing up in broken homes,god i atone for mans sin so please stop the suffering on this earth, no more death,despair,sickness and pain, god hear my name,i try to re frame,and keep sane, but it feels like hatred is running threw my veins, I'm filled with so much pain,and i have to contain all of it in my brain, my mind and body cant with stand this torment feels like my mind is in descent, |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
kids growing up with no father or mother,why do we kill each other," Wow this is a really powerful right, every line was so real. I'm here if you even need anyone to talk to. Krysti ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
"i wish you could see the world from my eyes, the world is a cruel place filled with death and demise" I really loved the first two lines. They (as well as the rest of the poem) were amazing  So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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blue face Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 92 |
This poem has so much meaning to it and the flow of it is amazing hope to read more sarah |
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MindBeyondBody Junior Member
since 2007-08-02
Posts 14Florida,United States |
Thank you Guys for all the feedback |
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