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lovergurl
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since 2007-05-08
Posts 59
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0 posted 2007-07-27 12:18 PM



I'm tired of this sh*t
every little bit
if you're going to start treating me differently
leave me be
'cause I don't need this to happen again
i thought you were different than those other men
I'm sick and the only thing I want is you by my side
but it seems like you seem to go and hide
If you cant make it
dont tell me you can and let me wait and sit
dont get my hopes up high
just so they can crumble and die
when I call I'm missing you
so stop what you're doing for five minutes, and do what you got to do.
A female needs love and care
her heart is known to tear


Becca.

© Copyright 2007 Rebecca L. L. - All Rights Reserved
BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
1 posted 2007-07-27 01:56 PM


I liked where you were going with this...although, a lot of the rhyming seemed forced and some of the lines were too short or too long. But then again, what do i kno

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

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