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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-07-24 06:00 PM


I sit here thinking about what she's done,
closing my eyes on what she's become,

seeing her body at the funeral home,
what was she going through was she that alone?

hesitation marks scarred in red,
so much she never shared so much she left unsaid,

they have her wearing her best dress,
but no one takes notice because her bodys' a mess,

sometime I wonder what was going through her head,
that she thought she was better off dead,

I wonder if she would have stuck around,
said no to meth and stood her ground,

she wrote in blood on the wall,
here's a message to you all,

suicide doesn't solve anything,
I just couldn't wait for what fate would bring.


~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

© Copyright 2007 Krysti - All Rights Reserved
BrittanyJ
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1 posted 2007-07-24 09:03 PM


"what was she going through was she that alone?"

I loved the whole thing, but this was my favorite line. It's really sad when you hafta see something like that...I really enjoyed this

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

StormyB
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2 posted 2007-07-24 11:18 PM


very well written.
littlefairy
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3 posted 2007-08-07 12:33 PM


This poems made me want to hug you. I understand that losing someone to sucides hard. I have never had to face that but close people to me have. I know this might not help over all much but it tended to help my friends. Their happier now. They got what they wanted and it's only fair. To them it was worth it and we must respect that no matter how much it hurts. I hope that was some sort of help. The pain never dies.


blue face
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4 posted 2007-08-07 10:06 AM


Wow you've done it againe
this poem is amazing
hope to red more
sarah


Seeker72
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5 posted 2007-08-07 11:13 AM


"she wrote in blood on the wall,
here's a message to you all"

Brilliant... the whole poem was excellent but this stood right out.

Meth is a nasty demon.

hunnie_girl
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6 posted 2007-08-07 03:56 PM


Thank you all for your kind replies |
Krysti.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Kira Aso
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7 posted 2007-08-07 10:47 PM


Once again I'm struck speechless...
Always a pleasure reading you're lovely poems hunnie  


~Should the truth be so buried
in the endless cemetery of broken dreams?~

Yoinn
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8 posted 2007-08-19 05:01 AM


Wow
This one punched me right in the gut.
and thats a good thing.

Yoin

moondogz
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9 posted 2007-08-19 06:52 AM


very powerful ....thanks.
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